2009年10月22日 星期四

My trip to Diney Land

At the start of the year, I go to Japan and play in Disney Land for a whole day, Ireally enjoy the time in there and play alot of facilities, Iwant to get there again!
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  1. 某某人2009年10月25日 晚上10:35

    grammar mistakes:
    ......,I go to Japan....
    should be
    ......,I went to Japan....
    enjoy should be enjoyed
    play should be played

    Please remember when you must use past tense

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